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JericHikari
May 9, 2007, 04:10 PM
Aaaaand since I have a computer tha'ts able to handle BB, a copy of GiMP, and a load of free time on my hands as well as ideas that's been in my head for the past few years I give you a bit of something that I've been working on.

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JericHikari
May 10, 2007, 09:43 AM
Bumpdate:


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Rainbowlemon
May 10, 2007, 11:06 AM
I love the style of this. Little things could be done to improve it, though. There are various spelling mistakes throughout - perhaps you should run your text through a spell-checker first. Also, I think it would actually be funnier if you avoided l33tspeak :|

Another thing...(sorry!)...you seem to mix past and present tense too easily. If you're gonna use past tense, box off the text so it appears as a "voice over" rather than him actually thinking there and then. I dunno, maybe that's just my preference, should probably get input from other people too http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_wink.gif

Overall, you've got the camera and style perfect though! Its just the text that need a bit of work.

PhotonDrop
May 12, 2007, 11:47 PM
Yay, a comic thats actually in comic form http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_wacko.gif

I like it so far, I hope to read more! Just... with less spelling mistakes http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_smile.gif

JericHikari
May 13, 2007, 11:23 AM
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I like the new font better than the stock ms comicbook thing. That and hopefully I caught the spelling errors in this one(there shouldn't be that many as there isn't that much text). Sorry there's only one this time around, but privet matters have demanded my attention lately.

JericHikari
May 19, 2007, 09:58 AM
And I've hit a bit of a snag. Only level 62 and I've gotten burnt out on BlueBurst. Then again with the server nearly dead and as a HUcast constantly getting beaten to the kills by overeager rangers and nuke happy forces(must be their revenge for cast needle abuse. Of course it doesn't help that the majority of games are either locked or are tagged 'JP Onrry'(really, i could rant on that on end for awhile, but that's for the dead horse subforum).


In short while I like doing the comic I'm burnt out on the game.