Page from my sketchbook

[Kion]

http://i190.photobucket.com/albums/z88/kion_01/jump.jpg

*disclamer*I was drawing for practice, this is not my original drawing. Here's the original (http://i190.photobucket.com/albums/z88/kion_01/aed_kenran.jpg). I can't remember where it's from, does any body know?

Edit: oh yeah, and critisism would be nice. i want to know what i need to improve on.



<font size=-1>[ This Message was edited by: Kion on 2007-09-12 00:48 ]</font>

[GutsGO]

All of the appendages are off and lack depth, they are very flat looking. The hair, face and eyes also lack energy and emotion...try and exaggerate things a bit more. Did you rough this out before you started?

Start with basic shapes and gesture lines of the subject to get an idea of where arms should be and how they are moving in relation with the rest of the body.....

....and remember, sketches are sketches so be loose to feel out the drawing.

[Skye-Fox713]

yeah, i agree with GutsGO.

it's ok, but the anatomy is off in the limbs, the torso is ok but can use some work.

and just like GutsGO said start off with gesture lines they help a lot, and remember draw lightly at first then when u get into more details you can get darker.

[DikkyRay]

sure as hell better than any crap i can draw

[Sgt_Shligger]

Now why is it I never get any criticism. . . Also, is it a guy or a really flat girl?

[Skye-Fox713]

On 2007-09-11 12:56, Kion wrote:
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I was drawing for practice. Here's the original (http://i190.photobucket.com/albums/z88/kion_01/aed_kenran.jpg)



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[Kion]

On 2007-09-11 19:56, Sgt_Shligger wrote:
Now why is it I never get any criticism. . . Also, is it a guy or a really flat girl?



Did you ask nicely for it? and it's a girl. see link to original drawing at the bottom.

GutsGO, and Sky-Fox thanks for the critique. To run it back for confirmation, i need to draw light until I get the proportions right, before i start adding in detail. Also I need to work more on lines and shading to give my character more expression. I'll try to do a few more drawings to try and improve.

And Sky-Fox, why the ". . ."? I did the drawing for practice, I wanted to make it clear that i didn't design the character.

[biggabertha]

The biggest problem with drawing from someone else's drawing is that you will copy all of the artist's mistakes as well as making your own. However, with that in mind, you should always aim not to copy the pose 100% but instead change things here or there.

From the original picture, it's clear that the right wrist bends the way it does but it's not so clear on your own picture. Also, the knees seem like knees on the original but not on yours because it's missing highlight/extra features.

Oops, after comparing the picture again, I noticed that you didn't copy the pose 100% and you did change it slightly, most notably the direction of the head. Good work nonetheless though, there's some excellent detail on the jacket and nice movement/creases.

[Kion]

http://i190.photobucket.com/albums/z88/kion_01/sketch2.jpg

the actual looks much cleaner. pencil doesn't like to scan http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_frown.gif. Copying someone else's work was practice, so hopefully i can get feedback on what i draw from imagination.

Edit: oh and know that i made him disproportionately skinny. i did that on purpose as i thought it added depth to the expression on his face.


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[Skye-Fox713]

On 2007-09-11 23:15, Kion wrote:
On 2007-09-11 19:56, Sgt_Shligger wrote:
Now why is it I never get any criticism. . . Also, is it a guy or a really flat girl?



Did you ask nicely for it? and it's a girl. see link to original drawing at the bottom.

GutsGO, and Sky-Fox thanks for the critique. To run it back for confirmation, i need to draw light until I get the proportions right, before i start adding in detail. Also I need to work more on lines and shading to give my character more expression. I'll try to do a few more drawings to try and improve.

And Sky-Fox, why the ". . ."? I did the drawing for practice, I wanted to make it clear that i didn't design the character.



i was reffring Sgt_slinnger to the refrence image

[GutsGO]

I like the new one, it's got a lot of feeling to it.

He looks a little too anorexic though...like he's dying and barely can walk. If you are going for this then you nailed it perfectly, and indeed, it accents the expression on the face quite well.

I know feet are a pain, but it would've brought the whole image together if you drew them or cropped the image with them in it (can't really tell if you did draw them or not). Also giving the ground some shadow or texture would help too to show life to the drawing.

Otherwise, try throwing some shading/light sourcing in to show value and depth and this would be a pretty powerful image of a troubled boy trying to survive. Maybe it's a Guardian in training and got separated from his Instructor and is finding his way back to the Flyer Base. lol

[Sgt_Shligger]

On 2007-09-11 23:15, Kion wrote:
On 2007-09-11 19:56, Sgt_Shligger wrote:
Now why is it I never get any criticism. . . Also, is it a guy or a really flat girl?



Did you ask nicely for it? and it's a girl. see link to original drawing at the bottom.



Sorry, t hat came out as offensive rather than humorous ;(

Didn't make a comment about the drawing since anything I would have mentioned had already been posted. And, yes, I do ask nicely for them, though the problem may be the people who actually offer criticism never check my works, or I'm just bad with timing.