Tentative Title - The Last Dance - Chapter 1 [Archive]

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Spy

01-17-2003, 02:29 AM

http://www.pioneer3.net/spylord/last_dance_one.txt

I would have just copied and pasted, but I guess that method doesn't like quotation marks. Sorry.

IceBlink

01-17-2003, 08:05 AM

Flows nicely, but the character "Spy" is thrown in too quickly without any description. To a first time reader, this could get confusing, perhaps?

Quotation marks... " " ?

Spy

01-17-2003, 07:41 PM

I figure most people know enough about Spy already so I skipped all that intro crap.

The ""s get turned into ?s when they get parsed by the server. *shrug*

IceBlink

01-17-2003, 09:57 PM

A picture is worth a thousand words. Or something.

One description can't hurt!

*considers doujin of PSO, but frowns, knowing Snap and Cienna will force him to make it H*

Ness

01-18-2003, 06:59 PM

The character Spy is pretty cool except for the fact that he smokes.