View Full Version : Tentative Title - The Last Dance - Chapter 1

Jan 17, 2003, 03:29 AM

I would have just copied and pasted, but I guess that method doesn't like quotation marks. Sorry.

Jan 17, 2003, 09:05 AM
Flows nicely, but the character "Spy" is thrown in too quickly without any description. To a first time reader, this could get confusing, perhaps?

Quotation marks... " " ?

Jan 17, 2003, 08:41 PM
I figure most people know enough about Spy already so I skipped all that intro crap.

The ""s get turned into ?s when they get parsed by the server. *shrug*

Jan 17, 2003, 10:57 PM
A picture is worth a thousand words. Or something.

One description can't hurt!

*considers doujin of PSO, but frowns, knowing Snap and Cienna will force him to make it H*

Jan 18, 2003, 07:59 PM
The character Spy is pretty cool except for the fact that he smokes.