Fan Fic 1

[Master_of_Dragons]

i am posting my first fic so any coments are welcome.



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[Master_of_Dragons]

Prologue:

The past of this warrior is not known by the keepers of this sanctuary. We only know the basic details of this unknown hunter from the planet of Ragol. This is a note we received hundreds of years ago. My father's father was one of the ones who received the acknowledgment of this warrior.

I will fill you in as of the bases of the story I heard from my granddad just before he died.
His final words were as follows, "You.. are his reincarnation. He is in you, it is your destiny. You are the one to defeat the coming evil, the vile creation, it is D...

I do not know what he was saying to me at that last moment, but I will follow his word and find out this D... creature. And I will uphold this prophecy that was given to me.

I will find this out and fulfill my dead granddads wish to exterminate this evil outcast.


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[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 1

The search for the unknown

I have been studying the notes my granddad had given me at his deathbed. The warriors name was the same as mine. Coincidence, I think not. My granddad saw great things in me I guess.

A few days later I found this old article in my old bedroom at my granddads house. It says there was a giant blast that destroyed the pioneer project. The source was described as an alien creature native to the planet. Dar... the rest was to hard to decipher.

"It was horrible", said a strange voice from the shadows.

"Who is there", I replied very cautiously.

"I was there on the pioneer", replied the strange old man that walked out of the shadows. "I was there that horrible day. All was lost, my home, my family, and all my friends aboard the Pioneer 1. A form of a huge creature rose from the ground from the depths of the spaceship ruins. It took aim on us and fired a deadly assault killing everyone. I was out exploring the landscape of the area so I was unharmed. The Pioneer 2 sent hunters to investigate the rubble. Cough, Cough, I was the only one left. And I needed rescue. I was so hungry I returned to the disaster zone. I felt the ground shake and I fell. Down deep into the surface of Ragol."

"What does this have to do with me", I said confused.

He replied with a hacking cough and he fell over.

I did not notice that he was bleeding form the wound on his leg. As if he was bitten by something. He fell to the ground and passed out. The wound was all across his legs. It looked as if he was being chased by a Delbiter. "But those are in the seabed", I muttered to my self.

"Grrrrrrrrrrr", a creature behind me growled. I turned and?




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[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 2

Attacked by the Enemies Hound

Behind me was what had attacked the man. It lounged at me. I rolled out of the way and pulled out my brave and shot it. It had little effect on this creature. I noticed this was no ordinary Delbiter I was dealing with. No, this was being controlled by a evil presence.

The Delbiter wounded from my shot fled into the darkness. The man spoke, "Did you just save me from that awful thing."

"No I was defending myself", I said with fear still in my eyes.

"That proves it, you are the legendary hunter's reincarnation. You must be Draco. Your grandpa and I go way back. Back to the day where all was lost. A vicious creature had taken over a young hunters body and unleashed its evil upon the Pioneer."

"How am I the legendary hunter. I am just Draco. The son of my father Leo."

"And the grandchild of the hunters most best friend.", he interrupted.

Now that I know what I am it is time to find out this creature and finally put it to rest.

I start my journey where most people would start theirs. The Forest of Sorrow.




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[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 3

The Forest Demon

I came out of the forest teleportation device and walk to the first door. I was locked meaning that I wasn?t secure to continue without slaying the wild creatures. I realized I was have to use my sword my granddad gave me. The Agito.

The Agito was once the legendary hunter's sword. Which was scarred with torment of hundreds of years.

I found out where the creatures where hiding and quickly made waste of them. Letting the door open I walked through.

This next room had a nest of large mosquitoes in it. The name was lost in the database of my computer. I hurried in and slashed the two out of the air and sliced the nest apart.

Boomas appeared and swarmed over me. There had to be more than twelve of these lurking about. One after one dropped to my sword.

I continued on till I reached the point where the teleportation to the central dome was. I killed the wolfs that guarded the area and went.

I arrived in a room with no enemies. So I pressed the switch to open the door.

In the next room was lurking a giant. The creature I believe was a Hildebear. This massive creature attacked me without hesitation. I was forced to stick to defending. Blow after blow I took until the time was right. I swung my sword and cut the belly of the beast.

It hunched over and died. I pressed on hoping no more of these would appear.

Sure enough I arrived at the central dome only to see another of the creature called Hildebear. I mad waste of it using the same method as before.

The dome was destroyed and there was no entrance. I noticed a teleport off to the side so I went in.

I ended up at the lair of the dragon. This massive creature walked towards me. And stopped to breath its horrible fire breath upon me.

I ran close to its feet slashing away at its leg. It let out a growl and fell to the ground.

I walked toward its head and keep up the pace and slashed for my life.

It arose again and took flight. So I pulled out my bravace and shot it out off the air. It had dropped to the ground and had died. I realized this was yet a test. I am expected to do far greater things then to slay a dragon.

With that I left.




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[Master_of_Dragons]

thsts all i have for now. comments on how to continue are welcomed.

[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 4

The Enemy Within the Cave

The portal the caves had been opened so I proceeded through to the portal.

There I found a giant dragon. Similar to the forest dragon but smaller. It seems to hate all the creatures for it turned his back on them. I was lucky till I noticed that he had grown in size for every monster he had slain.

I quickly disposed of the dragon and fled to the next room fearing there was more on the way.

In this room I encountered a slimy creature that was trying to spit at me. I struck it and it split. I used Rafoie and it died. I made note not to do that again.

I pressed on meeting foes as Evil Sharks and Pal Sharks. As well as the great Guil Shark. These were great foes when in numbers. I made waste of them with my Agito.

Soon I came to a door sealed with a lock. Seems a switch is needed to open the door. I looked around and spotted a switch on the ground. But there is two of them. One is surely fake. I found this item a while back. Maybe it will aid me. I used a trap vision and surely enough there was a landmine hovering over the left one. I stepped on the right switch and the door unlocked.

In this room there was a giant pillar. It had a emblem of some sort. I pressed it and a fiery light swallowed the giant sculpture.

I will find this out later. So Pressed on. I got to a portal that seemed to be bigger than the rest. I held my breath and went in.

The giant snake like beast arose form the cannel. It was the feared beast of the underground cannel.

I was on a raft stranded in a current of misguided water. The creature leaped on to the raft. With no hesitation I slashed like mad. To my relief he fell off the raft.

Moments later he rose again with a stream of bubbles spraying at me. I was hit hard. I quickly used resta to restore my life. The monster had jumped up again. This time I broke off the skull mask it wore. and he fell off again.

Suddenly the light flickered off. I was beside him. So i used my bravace to shoot the wounded face of the creature. He floated back to the end of the raft and lifted high out of the water. Letting out a beam of light. I rolled out of the way as he did it again.

Soon enough the lights were on again and he had leaped back up for another beating. I slashed him one after another until at last he had died.

With the success of this battle I quickly hopped in to the portal. I ended up at this weird place. It was full of robots that were going to...

Moments later he rose again with a stream of bubbles spraying at me. I was hit hard. I quikly used resta to restore my life. The monster had jumped up again. This time I broke off the skull mask it wore. and he fell off again.

Suddenly the light flickered off. I was beside him. So i used my bravace to shoot the wounded face of the creature.he floated back to the end of the raft and lifted high out of the water. Letting out a beam of light. I rooled out of the way as he did it again.

Soon enough the lights were on again and he had leaped back up for another beating. I slashed him one after another until at last he had died.

With the success of this battle I quikly hopped in to the portal. I ended up at this weird place. It was full of robots that were going to...


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[DnaX]

So exciting! Hope to hear more! http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/anime1.gif

>.< X



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[Master_of_Dragons]

I want to thank my friends for telling me to post my progress.

thx DnaX and Slicer

[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 5

A Break in the Action

I returned to the Pioneer 2 for some relaxing. I new that those robots where to hard to handle with the equipment I have right now.

I took out my savings which was about 200,000 meseta and bought me a spiritual shield and a ultimate frame.

I still had around 25,000 meseta so I bought some fluids and mates. Then I bought some armor units. A general power and a PB/amplifier.

With all that done I went to the guild to earn some of my money back. I asked the guild lady if there was any quests I could do.

"We have a quest in the Forest region. It is a search and rescue. It seems a little boy was playing around the portal and he fell in. He was transported to the forest and hasn't been seen since."

I replied with a nod and took the portal to the forest. I walked around the area and saw a place that I didn't travel last time. There was a well type of area. I took the transporter down to the bottom.

As expected the little boy was down here. I picked up the kid and took a telepipe to the city. I handed over the boy to his mother and father.

I was paid 20,000 meseta for this easy quest. I'm not complaining though.

With some of my meseta back I went to the bank and deposited it before I left.

I am done with quests for now. Maybe later when I run out of cash I will try another one. For right now I am fine.

I built up my courage and walked through the teleporter.


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[Slicer238]

*pops head from dark spot* leave me be with my precious. Oh yeah nice fic. *disappears back into the dark*



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[Master_of_Dragons]

Thx for the reply *pops the darkness dweller*

[Slicer238]

*Gets Hippy sensing cruise missle and blasts Master out of the domian* stay out of my dark area.

[Master_of_Dragons]

Gets a evil shark to raid ur darkness and pry out any good thoughts of my fic.



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[Slicer238]

*smacks evil shark with fish* stay the hell out. Or your fic will suffer.

[Master_of_Dragons]

*whimpers in fear for the fic*

[Slicer238]

...........................Did you know that most small business fail in their first year. Oh wait a minute I was lecturing a class. Good fic.

[Master_of_Dragons]

Any suggestions

[DnaX]

Okiz...Itz great! The chapters are being written so fast. http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/anime2.gif

>.< X

[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 6 might be delayed

[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 6

The Lost Soul

I took a request by the principal to go to the Pioneer 1 wreckage and find any survivors.

I went to the forest again to investigate the wreckage. As I went on I started to notice the scent of the huge Hildebear. I keep walking. Cautiously I walked up to the area that the scent was coming from.

A blue beast was standing there. I never seen this type of Creature. It was crying. Believe it or not the huge beast was moping. I approached it. I said, "Are you okay?", to it. And it turned around. It didn't attack me. It just stood there like it had understood me. I said, "Are you okay?'", again.

This time it replied, “Yes I am the only one though."

It could talk. It was speaking English as plain as day. "You are the only one?" I said confused.

"Yes I am okay. I suppose you want to kill me now", It said.

"No, no, no, I don't want to kill you", I said. "I just want to find out what I am seeing."

"I am known as a rare monster, Hildeblue. People come from all over and kill my kind. I am the only one left. Then my species will be extinct", It said to me.

I walked up to it feeling sorrow. "I am sorry for the recklessness of my fellow humans. I need to find out something from you" I said to the Hildeblue.

"What do you want from me, My head! All my fellow Hildeblues are beheaded by your kind", It said angered.

"I need to know if any of the people still live here. I am sorry your kind is destroyed by my people. I am not like that. I only kill what attacks me. That is why you are still alive", I said teasingly.

"Well, there was a human dwelling around here. I think someone lives there. I only know this. I thank you for sparing my life", he said.

And with that he left.

I went to search were he had said the house was. Surely enough there was a house there.

No one has been there it looked like. Probably for a while. So I went back empty handed.

I went back to the area where I saw the Hildeblue. He was there with a female and they had children. I guess he was trying to keep his family safe.

What a nice father. Reminds me of my granddad.


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[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 7

Dreams

"Its all over, we are all doomed", an unknown voice was saying this over and over.

"Who is there" I replied.

"Its all over, we are all doomed", the voice repeated.

"Who are you, where are you?"

"I am over here", the voice echoed.

"Where?"

A man appeared out of the darkness. "It will be over soon", he said.

It was my granddad. He was talking to me.

"GRANDPA!"

He had disappeared back into the darkness.

"NO, GRANDPA, COME BACK!"

Then I woke up drenched in sweat.

"Grandpa, what were you telling me."


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[Master_of_Dragons]

Its a short one but crucial to the story line.

[DnaX]

Your fic is really exciting! http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/anime1.gif I like it when premonitions happens...

>.< X

[Master_of_Dragons]

Seems chapter 8 will have to wait a while

[Master_of_Dragons]

I am running out of ideas so i need some suggestions

[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 8

New Alliances

After the dream I had, I knew I must hurry up and keep up the pace. I had to continue my quest. I had to fight hard.

Today was a dark and gloomy day where all the creatures were in hiding. So this was a easy travel back to the caves sinc the portals are down from the rain.

I went to the caves entrance. I slaughtered a few Evil Sharks and Pal Sharks. I cleaned out the top caves. Then went trough the middle.

I transported to the bottom of the caves. As I walked through the cave I saw a mob of Sharks crowded around a lone FOnewearl. And with a single Rafoie technique the were all killed. She had beat all the Sharks with a single technique.

I walked up to her and said, "Are you okay?"

She was to tired to respond so I gave her a difluid to regenerate her tp. She rose up and said, "Yes, thank you for the help."

"May I ask your name", I said to her.

"Dark Angel, My name is Dark Angel", she replied.

"Will you join me", I asked.

"Yes, Yes I will", she said with excitement.

I walked closer to her and helped her up to her feet. We walked of together down the hall to the underground cannel.

The giant serpent was there again fully restored.

"But how, I killed it", I said to myself.

The battle began with a bang. Dark Angel use Rafoie and Shifta. Giving me a boost in attack strength. I quickly pulled out my Bravace and blew off his skull mask.

"Dang", Dark Angel said in astonishment.

I use Rafoie also and moved out of the way. He had jumped up on the raft and started attacking her.

In rage I slashed as hard as I could cutting of his tentacles.

"Thanks", Dark Angel said.

It had fell off the raft and roared in pain. The battle was over. She had gained a level and we found a star atomizer and a few other items on the raft.

We took them and left.

It seems I had found a friend.



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[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 9

A Ranger Appears

I had made my way far. I was in the mines for the second time.

"I am scared", Dark Angel Replied. She was quivering in fear.

A glichic walked up to her and she had fried it with zonde.

I stared at her with eyes wide open and my jaw was to my knees. "Whoa", I managed to get out.

She was trembling. She is a powerful force yet she is a coward. Maybe I am overestimating her limits. Or maybe she is just a coward.

We had to keep walking so she wouldn't get to scared. We encountered more enemies and she keep leveling up.

Soon we entered a room where a lone ranger was shooting up a granaz and a lot of glichics. He had pin point accuracy and destroyed all of them in one shot each.

He fell from exhaustion. I ran up to him with Dark Angel. She used Resta and he stood up. I asked him his name.

He replied with a single word, "Ken."

I had asked him to join up with me.

"No", he said and he walked off.

"He is rude", Dark Angel replied.

"No he is being followed", I said.

There is a camera hovering close to the ceiling.
I aim at it with my Bravace. It was blown up. Before I shot.

"Thanks for getting its attention", Ken replied. "It will instantly kill me if it sees me shoot it."

I asked him to join again. This time he had said yes.

We had found the main portal and went in.

This creature was a giant computer. A screen was projecting an image. All the sudden ken blew up the monitor.

I followed him in this fashion and soon all the monitors were gone. A few pillars rose from the ground. There was a red one so I slashed it. Soon it had blown up. All the others where quickly blown up by Ken.

All of the sudden the room blew up. and a giant robot dropped from the ceiling.

I pulled out the flowens sword I picked up along the way and began to slash it.

Pillars from the ceiling same crashing down. Dark Angel was hit. I ran to her aid. As i was healing her Ken had blew off the back of the robots body.

He shouted, "Rockets are disabled!"

I quickly returned to the robot and cut off his healing structure.

A wall of unknown materials formed around Ken.

I ran to him and slashed at the wall. All of the sudden Rafoie blew up the wall.

Dark Angel had saved Ken. I ran to the side of the robot where he controlled the falling pillars. I gave it a Sword Swing and off it went.

The robot blew up. We had conquered the Giant Robot.

As for Ken...

I believe I have a new ally.


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[Master_of_Dragons]

Chapter 10

The Story Behind the Gun

We were low on cash and Ken needed this new rifle. So we went to the Hunters Guild to find a quest with good pay.

There was one that needed us to return to the mines. The description was find what I lost. Someone had lost something.

"Should we take this one", I said.

"I think we should", Ken said.

"Me too", Dark Angel said.

[Master_of_Dragons]

i will finish 10 later

[Master_of_Dragons]

can someone post some ideas

[Master_of_Dragons]

submit some for me please

[DnaX]

Getting interesting...

>.< X

[Sharkyland]

Rather a simplistic storyline... almost as if I was reading a children's book. Just curious about your style though. Don't you think you can elaborate with the details a bit more?

[Master_of_Dragons]

sure i will. after the story is done. i will elaberate on the first chapters as soon as i get done with it all. so any way. I will when i get done.

[Master_of_Dragons]

i dont like the way this fic is going so i am going to stop it here.

It is boring.

needs more adventure. storyline is gay and it needs work.

[Sharkyland]

You've probably heard of this saying before: "Rome wasn't build in a day."

[Master_of_Dragons]

well i dont care if it took 100 years this fic is trash.

[Sharkyland]

Brainstorm for ideas and try various writing styles (play format, regular format, or even journal-like formal similar to that of Rico's messages like day 3 this happened)

[Master_of_Dragons]

i dont really feel up to it

[Sharkyland]

Like I said, it's totally up to you.

[Master_of_Dragons]

In the future i may just keep on adding to it.

only if i get so good compliments tough.

[quote]... almost as if I was reading a children's book.

[Sharkyland]

My statement was kinda rough and... well you know degrading, and I'm sorry about that. http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/anime2.gif Though if you need help you can ask me.

[Master_of_Dragons]

I just have a brain malfunction right now.

no input coming in.

[Sharkyland]

Probably I'll give some input later, but... why do you write a fanfic? (is it because you want your characters to be so cool or is it something you just don't understand in PSO but you want to elaborate on your own). I answer to both of those questions in my fanfic. There's just too little information in some many areas that's why I don't seem to find it strange that none of the fanfiction are alike.

You see, you have an idea that no one else has ever thought about. Think, what can you do?