FanFic: Keizo Omeatachi-Chapter-1

[Anubis_]

Setting: F1- very hard

+A RAmar runs desperately as he tries to hide behind a wall. He peeks to the side to see if anyone is following him.. He hears footsteps behind him. He turns around to shoot and is hit with 3 shots in the chest and falls to ground.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer: {standing over looks at RAmar with smug look} How are you Kall.

+Kall draws hand gun and shoots once at Syfers. face and takes off running. Syfer blocks and shoots Kall twice in the back. Kall falls dead on the ground.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/18.gifKall- You bastard, Im outa TP and my DI’s all gone, I wuz gonna quit, you were gonna win anyway.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- Yeah, but then you wouldn’t hv lost any cash.. Its funner this way..

+Carla a HUnewearl runs from Delk until she is hit by Cromes mech special attack.
Delk catches up with her and lights a cigarette as she stands helpless in front of him and Chrome Paradox Paralyzed. Chrome sits down and Cocks his mechs.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/zz6.jpgCarla- If your gonna kill me then do it.. Do make me stand here.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/4.gif Delk- (Cigarette dangles from mouth) Naw honey, you made run through the woods. You deserve this..

+Carla looks impatiently as a bead of sweat rolls down her cheak.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/4.gif Delk- look ill do u a favor. (Puts Sol Atomizer on the ground in behind him )
Go ahead take it.. Complements of yours truely.

+Delk continues to smoke cigarette and pretends to look away.
+Carla walks slowly toward Sol Atomizer and stops just before she is able to tell what it is.
+Suddenly she dashes for item and Picks it up.
+Delk turns around swiftly and hits her with Rafoie from behind.
+Delks mail window opens..
..http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- did u kill her yet?
..http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/4.gif Delk- yeah shes dead..
..http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- Then hurry the fuck up.
+Delk angrily closes the mail window..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/zz30.jpgChrome- Arent you gonna help her out..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/4.gif Delk- {throws cigarette on the ground}Hell if she wants it she can have the fukin Monomate.

+Chrome and laughs as Delk casts Ryuker.

Setting: Antares08-01,

+Keizo Merk and Shara sit together at table, Lance comes to join them.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/22.gif {throws newspaper on table} Chalk another one up for the Ogre Clan
http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/10.gifKeizo- {Merk picks up paper}Who’d they beat this time.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/22.gif Scarlet, pretty bad too.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nhucast13.gifMerk- To bad they got put out so early I realy like that Kall guy.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/22.gif Yeah, he wasn’t a jerk off like all the rest of his Clan.. like that Carla..

+Keizo and Merk laugh under Breath..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/22.gif What?

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/afonewearl.gifShara- You mean the same Carla you pledge your undying love too.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/22.gif Noooo way.. I through with her, Im not gonna waist anymore time with her anymore. Shes a little to snooty and stubborn for my taste.,, Hey speaking of girlz, what ever happened to that girl Nei your always with Keizo, don’t see her around anymore.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/10.gifKeizo- {Closes eyes and Folds arms} Me and Nei decided not to speak anymore..

{Everyone pauses in akward silence}

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/afonewearl.gifShara- So you guys aren’t going to speak to each other anymore?.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/22.gif yeah that rather strange.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/afonewearl.gifShara- But I thought you guys were in love?

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/10.gifKeizo- {Blushes with embaressment and speaks quickly} NO NO.. It wasn’t like that, we just decided that it was time to go our seperate ways that’s all, its realy not such a big deal, Merk don’t we have something to do..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nhucast13.gifMerk- Syfer?

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- {walks over to table.} Hello kiddies, what new?

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/10.gifKeizo- What do you want Syfer?

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- Woah! wus with the attitude budy. I just came to see how my pal Lance is doin..

+lance cuts eyes and gives unsatisfactory look.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- So when are you gonna ditch these loosers and get with a real clan?

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/10.gifKeizo- {stands up quickly} What was that?

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- Common Kizo, This guys got way to much potential to be hanging around a bunch a little turd scrappers {Plops hand down on Sharas head.}

+Keizo balls fist

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/afonewearl.gifShara- Keizo.. Don’t..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- {Laughs out Loud} Getting mad huh kid? So what r u gonna do, strike me with your brand.

+Keizo begins to lundge for Syfer, Shara grabs Keizos arm.

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- Don’t get all high and mighty kid. Just because you’re the #1 contender in the league, it doesn’t mean u can beat everybody.. You for get Im in a class all on my OWN!! {Pushes Keizo to the Floor, Draws Heaven Punisher.}

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/ep311.gifKatina-{appears form hunter desk} SYFER!

+Syfer takes finger off trigger. Katina walks over from Hunter Destk..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/ep311.gifKatina-What the hell are you doing, Are you trying to get us all eliminated from the tournament.!

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer-{put away weapon}Ahh.. Don't worry about it, I wasn't going to hurt the little punk..

+Syfer walks tword hunter desk..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nramar14.gifSyfer- {shouts to Keizo from desk.} You should listen more to your friends kid youll live longer!..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/Nhucast13.gifMerk- Don't worry about it, just let it go....
+Shara and Merk help Keizo off the floor..

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/afonewearl.gifShara- Are you Hurt?

http://www.pso-world.com/images/phpbb/avatar/10.gifKeizo- Just my pride..

-End-

[-Z]

nice beggining! must be annoying to get the character pics and everything in. keep up the good work ^_^

[mr_rubbish]

Interesting format. Gives it a real comic-book feel to it. Some spelling issues and grammatical gremlins (missing words mainly) though. Definitely shows promise.

[MQuantum]

This is a very novel idea... Quite interesting, really...

[Mixfortune]

I agree that it is an interesting format. I don't recall
seeing one done that way before http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_smile.gif
Almost reminds me of PS4, heheh.

Just brush it up a bit, check over the grammatical
errors and such and have at it! http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_biggrin.gif

[Sagasu]

wpretty much what they said', keep going.

[Anubis_]

Oh my frikin gosh.. i guess i should hv tripple checked for spelling errors.. These Lab computers at school don't allow you to save documents to the hard drive and I lost my zip disk so I had to Write the whole thing in a few hours.. Sorry for all the gramatical errors.. For some reason all the ' changed to ? when I coppied it from word.. go figure.. I promise to do better next time.. Thanx for all the positive feedback..

[Sumo]

Woah, nice. It has an awesome, unique feel to it. Im looking forward to more.

[Yang_Ishii]

So many fictions to read, so little time. I'm definitely going to come back and look at this one after class.