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Over
Dec 27, 2003, 05:42 PM
Prologue: Pioneers

'We're under fire!' The commander of Verocai, a beautiful, prosperous planet filled with people, well, it was before the invaders marched in. They were called the Samedi and they marched in a great legion towards the planets that were prosperous. The Samedi marched with no feeling and shot perfectly, shouting 'KILL KILL KILL, WE ARE THE SAMEDI' each had one eye with one million eyes inside it.

'Load the transports!' The president shouted above the screams of people and the sounds of guns and shouting of the Samedi.
'YES SIR!' The soldiers shouted and gathered the civilians into the 3 pioneer ships.
The 3 ships departed leaving behind the brave warriors who soon were defeated. The evil monsters fired at one of the ships and it fell straight into the fuel cell. The planet exploded around them. The flames chased the ships and the two pilots skilfully avoided the flames. Explosions came either side of the ships and the pilots had to use all their skill to avoid the flames that reached out to get the ships like a hand when someone else offers their favourite sweet to them. They got out just in time and set out towards Ragol, a planet they had heard about.

Chapter 1

The man sat by the cliff top, watching the sea lap against the seashore of Maladin Island. He felt the cold breeze against him and the putrid rain hitting his cheeks. He was a strong man with a black suit and was called Pan. He did not care about the rain, he was more upset about his island.
Maladin was gradually sinking into the depths of the ocean and as far as the islanders knew, the rest of the world had been destroyed by the water rising. But they were wrong. Towards the north, a small ship had been launched called Pioneer 2 was orbiting a section of the planet, Ragol. Ragol was one of the 2 places left the earth although the islanders of Maladin were not to know this. The people were from another planet and had come because their planet was destroyed. The people on Pioneer 2 were very advanced, building androids and other kind of powerful technology.
They had little time, on the island of Maladin, as the water was almost at the peak of the island. They decided to leave the next day, in hope of finding land, as they knew that they would perish anyway. There were only about 30 people in Maladin, 4 children, 16 adults and 10 elderly. The elderly wanted to stay behind. They had spent 70 years on that island, the new place was not for them.
The next day provisions for the oncoming trip were made and the two boats set off. After 1 hour of cruising, the storm started and the 2 boats were sent banging around, their wooden planks barely could take the extreme pressure of the sea. Then, the monster rose out of the sea and tried to attack the boats, the people thought the end was near, little did they know that 2 saviours had came in the midst of danger.





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Gnarled_rose
Dec 27, 2003, 05:51 PM
one eye with one million eyes
For future reference, that's called a "compound" eye. In case anyone else was wondering.
Fairly average fanfic, although it might be a little risky, introducing new species into a fanfic. Try typing up a few more chapters and seeing how it turns out.

PhotonDrop
Dec 27, 2003, 06:06 PM
On 2003-12-27 14:51, Gnarled_rose wrote:
although it might be a little risky, introducing new species into a fanfic.

Damn! And I was going to put in a few Dezolians in my fic.

Sagasu
Dec 27, 2003, 11:46 PM
Wierdnesss @_@

But weirdness is cool so ur ok.