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badbitz
Dec 31, 2003, 02:52 PM
CHAPTER 1 OF THE PSO MATRIX--IMMERSION
Ok, CHAPTER 1 is all done for your veiwing pleasure
-_-
it contains all the parts plus a few new ones for one big chapter.
Enjoy.


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wake up, Flowen, the Matrix has you...
In his dream, the only existance was himself, floating in an endless whirlpool of thoughts...

Come to another world with me...where everything is limitless....the Real world

"Do I have a choice?" thought Him, in his own mind...his thoughts..
then

The light shown with an intense brightness.
A dark shadowy figure stood over Flowen.
The choice is yours It said

"Where the hell am I?" said Flowen, standing up abruptly in his new surrounding.
This wasn't his silent room on Pioneer 2.

Take the Red pill or the Blue pill It said
The choice is yours!


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The blue pill will let you go back to your fake existance...to nonlife.

"Ok." said Flowen, already getting ready to take the blue pill.

The red pill will take you the true world...the world without limits.

"Neat." said Flowen.

Make your choice...Now!
"What does each one do again?" said Flowen.
For christ's sake just pick one! said the dark entity, stirring.

"Awwww what the hell" Flowen said as he downed the red pill with a given glass of water.

Flowen started to choke.

"What the hell! You're killing me!!!" gasped Flowen.

This is where you are wrong...you are not dieing.
Your life is just beggining!


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He was back again in his own existance...
Not feeling, not knowing...
Suddenly he was submerged in a vast expanse of water.
It was ice cold to the touch and made Him aware of all His pores.
Do you not feel alive yet?
A distant voice...
Suddenly, memory floodd back to Him.
"Aw damn" sputtered Flowen, struggeling to swim.
Be witness to wonder!
"Oh my god that bastard put me on drugs!" said Flowen outraged.
This is not a drugged world...this is the True world
"What do you want from me!" yelled Flowen, still floating above ground.
He was not afraid to move, for fear of falling.
It's not what I want from you...Its what You want from yourself.
Your pastlife was all a lie...you were living in a Dream world!
As suddenly as before...Flowen was immersed in a huge gladiator like stadium.
You have had a taste of wonder...Now comes the real thing!


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Flowen stepped into the center of the sand arena, not knowing what to expect next.
Do you think you are ready for combat?
"Heck yeah, as long as I have some photon..."
The way you will learn combat, you won't need photon.

"I'm still confused you know...I think I'm dreaming..."
You know you aren't dreaming.
Before you begin, you will have Neop here to assist you.

A man materialized in front of Flowen.
"Hello, I'm Neop, a person here to help you."
Neop thrust out his hand to shake Flowen's.
Not trusting, Neop didn't return the greeting.
You must learn to trust Neop with your life. He and selected others are part of a resistance, as well as you may be.
"Resistance?" said Flowen "Whatever, lets just start this so-called combat training."
Neop went to stand next to Flowen.
Let it begin!
Out of the shadows of the arena emerged 3 strange huge creatures.
The creatures ran straight toward Neop and Flowen.
Flowen started to panic.
He looked over at Neop.
Neop was cooly staring at the oncoming hoard.
"Brace yourself..." Neop whispered.

That's when they were upon them.

During his life on Pioneer 2, Flowen was never noted to be an expert fighter.
He usually got his way during a battle by using dirty fighting techniques or just bashing someone across the head.
That's what he tried to do then.
When the monsters were upon them, Flowen quickly tried to cleave off the head of the monster with shear strength.
The monster met his every move with a strong claw, bloodieing Flowen's knuckles.
Flowen realized the monster was just waiting for him to make a mistake.

Flowen glanced over to see how Neop faired.

Neop had already disposed of one of the monsters and was skillfully fighting the second.

This threw Flowen into an outrage.

Why could Neop kill them but he couldn't..!
Flowen lashed out with all his might...Only to be caught in a death grip by the monster.

The tendons of the monster buldged as it tried to crush Flowen's neck. He knew this would be the end...
(P.S THIS IS NOT THE END OF THE STORY)


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It all happened so suddenly.
Neop, seeing his partner in danger, quickly dispatched of the monster facing him. Knowing Neop couldn't reach Flowen in time, Neop thrust a glowing ball of energy at the monster holding Flowen.
It perished instantly.
"Are you alright, Flowen?" asked Neop.
Flowen backed away from Neop slowly.
"You...you cast a strange spell on one of those monsters...how? How? I didn't sense a technique being cast..."
"This is the Power.." said Neop "You will learn more of it later, perhaps."
I am pleased with your success. This is just your first lesson Flowen; approach battles cautiously.

I will transport you out of VR now.
"VR training!?" yelled Flowen "You mean this wasn't real?! I wasn't gunna die?!"
This isn't ordinary VR...you are in the Matrix.
Any injuries you get within the matrix you will keep.

"Oh great", said Flowen, looking down at his bloodied knuckles.


Now Transporting...


Flowen awoke within the same room he awoke within earlier.
Neop was standing next to him, and the dark figure was there too.

"Now it is time for you to learn my name."
The figure thrust aside his dark cloak, reveiling a sturdy man.
"My name is Nickel."
"Ok..." said Flowen "Now what is this resistance..?


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"You are part of a rebellion now." said Nickel "Just talking to me is treason upon the Empire itself....you are already deep within conflicts."
"What the hell?" asked Flowen "How the hell did this all happen? I'm really confused...One day I wake up and all this is happening..! It's just.."
"Calm yourself, Flowen." said Nickel, swiftly walking over to stand by his side "You will soon see the reason for all this."
"Explain to me then! I want to know what the hell is going on! Tell me!"
Neop was sitting down, his back turned to Flowen.
"Tell me, dammit!"
"They killed my family." Neop spoke up unexpectantly "They took everything I valued...I sometimes wish I was never born..."
He rested his hands on his head.
Flowen didn't know what to say.
"It all started when the Empire went into civil war." Nickel said.
Flowen sat back, listening intently.


"When the Power was discovered, the Empire was thrust into a civil war between the people that wished to conquer the strength of the Power, and those that wanted it banned."
"Eventually, the side that wished to have the Power as an important piece of everyday life slaughtered King Morris, the leader of the Empire and also a supporter of the ban group."
"This brought chaos to the Empire...not only for that certain side but everyone, for the King of all the Empire was dead. The supporters eventually won that war."

"But unfortunately it wasn't over."
"Of course..." Nickel said, as he started pacing "Of course now the Power is used commonly."
"But the corrupt leader of the Power users, General Flek, was soon rose to King."
"All those that didn't like his reign were said to have 'Died in bed'."

"He currently rules right now and is destroying everything just for sport."
"Thus the Rebellion was established."
"Our goal is to defeat General Flek....and you are a key to that."

"What..?" Flowen finally spoke "What the hell are you talking about I just want to get outta this mess..!"
Flowen's speech was met with the sounds of silence.
"What the hell!!!!!" shouted Flowen.
"I can't beleive this!"
"Get ready to leave guys!" sahouted Nickel suddenly.
"Huh..?" said Flowen.
Neop was up in a flash.
"Aisha says there is trouble coming..she needs assistance...she told me through the Power and she said it was urgent!" said Nickel.
Nickel and Neop started running for the door.
"Come on!" shouted Neop to Flowen.
The confused Flowen was left to follow.


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They sprinted down long hallways Flowen had never seen before.
"Hurry up, Flowen; this is no time for sluggishness!" shouted Nickel as he ran. "I just hope we all make it out of this mess alive.."
Flowen didn't know what to say, yet again, and he couldn't talk anyway beacuse of his constant panting.
The hallways were stark; not made to be showy but for comfortable use.
"Stop here." said Nickel "Aisha is coming through."
The wall to the left of Nickel suddenly exploded in a violent blast.
A woman and a group of people behind her stood within the rubble.
Neop ran up to her, Flowen followed.
"They are coming, Nickel, the Empire has found our base!"
hurried the woman. "There is no time--"
"Where are the Empire troops now?" Interrupted Nickel.
"We need to hurry and evacuate."

The hall was filled with a scream.

Behind the group of people should Empire soldiers, standing over a kill.
"Aww man more conflict..!" shouted Flowen.
"Filma!!!" Aisha screamed, flinging herself at the Empire soldiers.
The group instantly took up battle positions, and fighting commenced.

Neop ran over to the frightened Flowen as battle engaged. "These are friendly's" Neop pointed "Our allies consist of Aisha, Onkin, Expo, Senn, Leon, Muss, and the recently dead Filma."

Neop then ran over to assist his allies.

Flowen watched the battle for a while...he saw Nickel cleave through an Empire soldier's neck with his hand..and other things.
It was gruesome...that's why Flowen was to afraid to take part.
Not caring about what happened to any of them...
Flowen ran away as fast as he could.

He was running down the hallway, when he crashed into an Empire soldier.
That was when his trouble REALLY started.


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this is the end of CHAPTER 1--IMMERSION guys..
next chapter coming later -_-

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Robo47
Dec 31, 2003, 03:04 PM
*Scratches head*
You didn't get the idea from my thread did you?

badbitz
Dec 31, 2003, 03:06 PM
i owe robo47 for helping me with the idea
you get part o the cash

Robo47
Dec 31, 2003, 05:36 PM
precioussssss cashhhh [/LOTR dude impression]

badbitz
Dec 31, 2003, 07:19 PM
all the cash you want if it gets famous

badbitz
Dec 31, 2003, 08:05 PM
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badbitz
Dec 31, 2003, 08:46 PM
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badbitz
Dec 31, 2003, 10:20 PM
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badbitz
Dec 31, 2003, 11:50 PM
sorry about these balnk posts--i had to delete alot because of messed up fan fic

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Temjin-On
Jan 1, 2004, 12:30 AM
The PSO Matrix..... Interesting.
(waits for pso pirates of the carribean and such)

badbitz
Jan 1, 2004, 05:00 PM
hmmmm...pirates of the carribean..
nah would never work
unless they were sailing in space...
hmmmmm...

Garanz2
Jan 1, 2004, 05:56 PM
That reminds me of Skies of Arcadia.

Btw Badbitz, would it kill you to make the chapters/updates a little longer? It's an interesting idea and I'd like to see where it is going, but it doesn't flow as well when you read it one paragraph at a time, if you see what I mean.

badbitz
Jan 1, 2004, 06:45 PM
ya i know...all my updates will be longer frm now on -_-

Gnarled_rose
Jan 1, 2004, 06:52 PM
It doesn't bother you that you post consecutively, giving no room for proper ideas and responses? It's your story, I guess....
Anyway, I suppose it's a good story, even though it hasn't gone anwhere yet. Let's keep reading...

badbitz
Jan 1, 2004, 07:51 PM
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badbitz
Jan 1, 2004, 08:04 PM
response would be welcome, then ill make next part.
(it will be alot longer too)

badbitz
Jan 2, 2004, 06:00 PM
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Kadou
Jan 2, 2004, 06:22 PM
I have to say that this idea came to me a looong time before now, although it had a bit of .hack mixed in.

Anyway, you should cram everything you have so far together and call it a chapter. Otherwise, the parts seem too short.

badbitz
Jan 2, 2004, 08:59 PM
yes i know i was thinking of doing that...Ill call the first 8 parts the Begginning.

.hack you say? interesting...
anyway did you like it?
I need response before next part
a bit of combat -_-

Zebulan7
Jan 5, 2004, 08:51 PM
It is interesting and funny at the same time to see the things you adapted and things you threw out. Still, it dosen't seem to fit exactly into the PSO "universe" but thats what we have fanfics for.

badbitz
Jan 5, 2004, 08:54 PM
of course..
actually, i threw away alot from the actual movies, but it does still have the matrix feel.
thanks for the response -_-

badbitz
Jan 5, 2004, 11:11 PM
w000t part 7 tommorrow w00t

anyway, please guys I really want feed back on this it helps the making process -_-

also guys--to make it easier to read, tommorow i am cramming all parts together for easier reading--it will be called chapter 1 Immersion

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badbitz
Jan 6, 2004, 01:08 AM
ok its coming along now..Now you can't complain about length!

badbitz
Jan 6, 2004, 01:11 AM
okay im tired now...i will continue chapter 1 until part 7 of the pso matrix--the stark conclusion to the beggining....hang in there...*yawn*

badbitz
Jan 6, 2004, 08:47 PM
OK W00T--chapter 1--immersion is done..! Please read and please reply -_-

Zebulan7
Jan 6, 2004, 09:00 PM
I thought you were going to name it "The Beginning." I might try Pirates of the Carribian... http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_lol.gif

badbitz
Jan 6, 2004, 09:03 PM
might as well make skies of arcadia fanfic -_-

badbitz
Jan 6, 2004, 09:19 PM
a sig for my fanfic would be nice too...
if anyone wants to make one -_-

Sord
Jan 6, 2004, 10:01 PM
First Thougt: Badbitz is off his rocker.
Second Thought: Hey this is pretty funny.
Third Thought: Who the heck is talking?
Overall thoughts: To choppy, needs work on speech, this could turn out to be a good fic

rating 4/10

badbitz
Jan 6, 2004, 11:07 PM
yup i know
just wait for ch.2 -_-

i am off my rocker thank you.
in fact, wheel chair w00t

badbitz
Jan 6, 2004, 11:09 PM
On 2004-01-06 19:01, Sord wrote:
Overall thoughts: To choppy, needs work on speech, this could turn out to be a good fic



the reason it is choppy because it wasnt ment to be read like this...how i actually started making this fic was by doing each little section of the chap in "parts", but that didnt work, being cause each was too short.
so, basically, it wasn't meant to be read all at the same time.
the next chapter will be better though, i pwomise -_-

chapter 2 contains 2 different perspectives..
1st== Flowen, currently in jail
2nd==Senn, traveling with Aisha and Nickel and Neop to breack out Flowen.., and ultimately, find a safe haven.
Flowen will find out his purpose in the new world also
it will be called CHAPTER 2--BREAKOUT me thinks -_-



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badbitz
Jan 7, 2004, 12:39 AM
CHAPTER 2--BREAKOUT--PROLOGUE
heh heh this is right before the perspective switches to Senn so enjoy Flowen while it lasts http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/anime1.gif


Flowen woke up silently.
Everything was a blur...he remembered running from battle, only to be captured by whom he was escaping from.
"Crap crap crappity crap." muttered Flowen "What have you gotten youself into now..?"
He looked around the room he was in.
Scratch that, not a room, a darkly lit cell.
He stood up and went to the built-in privies.
His captore wasn't present...and he needed some way to pass the time...
After relieving his bladder, Flowen bashed his head against the stone wall.
He was knocked unconcious intstantly.


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Zebulan7
Jan 9, 2004, 05:58 PM
Oh so you only give us a prologue? Why don't you wait until you have all your things down, and then post. That way you don't have so many blanks when you put them together, thus allowing more space. Nice teaser though.