PJ
Sep 25, 2004, 01:17 PM
My first fan fic... although I don't think it's very good, I hope I can improve it along the way ^.^;;;
Actually, I decided to start with this stroy because it wasn't a huge part to my story arc... I have 11 Fanfic ideas, and I wanted to start off with one that wouldn't impact my characters background stories a lot. Why? Because right now, I'm trying to improve my Fic-writing skills. So please, criticise! Be so honest that it'll bring tears to my eyes! I know yu can do it http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_razz.gif
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Sarah peered over the fence and watched the FOmar at work. Practicing his Foie technique on the metal gate, and it seemed like his Foie was only getting better.
"Tehe," She giggled, "He's so cute..." The FOnewearl continued to stare, and fell into a dreamlike state. She sighed and mumbled, "I wish he'd atleast notice me..."
Although she had never talked to him, Sarah found out his name was Kyn from some... reliable... sources (Mostly PJ and Kohryu).She had spent many days watching him battle.
Sarah started to walk towards the teleporter to Pioneer 2. "Someday he'll notice me, then he'll ask me out. We'll go on a romantic walk on Gal De Val..." Her thoughts were disturbed as a Gulgus attacked her! "Get away from me you freak!"
Deeper in the Forest, Kyn heard her yell. "Hmm?"
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I plan for each of my fics to have a prologue, and 3 chapters, so... yeah. That's it. I know it's very short, but I'll work on that http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_biggrin.gif
Also, this fic still doesn't have a real name, so once I came up with it, I'll edit the title >.>
Actually, I decided to start with this stroy because it wasn't a huge part to my story arc... I have 11 Fanfic ideas, and I wanted to start off with one that wouldn't impact my characters background stories a lot. Why? Because right now, I'm trying to improve my Fic-writing skills. So please, criticise! Be so honest that it'll bring tears to my eyes! I know yu can do it http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_razz.gif
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Sarah peered over the fence and watched the FOmar at work. Practicing his Foie technique on the metal gate, and it seemed like his Foie was only getting better.
"Tehe," She giggled, "He's so cute..." The FOnewearl continued to stare, and fell into a dreamlike state. She sighed and mumbled, "I wish he'd atleast notice me..."
Although she had never talked to him, Sarah found out his name was Kyn from some... reliable... sources (Mostly PJ and Kohryu).She had spent many days watching him battle.
Sarah started to walk towards the teleporter to Pioneer 2. "Someday he'll notice me, then he'll ask me out. We'll go on a romantic walk on Gal De Val..." Her thoughts were disturbed as a Gulgus attacked her! "Get away from me you freak!"
Deeper in the Forest, Kyn heard her yell. "Hmm?"
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I plan for each of my fics to have a prologue, and 3 chapters, so... yeah. That's it. I know it's very short, but I'll work on that http://www.pso-world.com/psoworld/images/phpbb/icons/smiles/icon_biggrin.gif
Also, this fic still doesn't have a real name, so once I came up with it, I'll edit the title >.>