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Well if it helps, the best time to come up with a title is after you've completed the work, and want to summarize it in one word or phrase. It's not needed, and now it'll mess with your flow. But...

Extra on July 18, 2017 on page 45

Have you thought about naming your chapters something besides -Extra-, now that they're the main thing?

[spoiler-box]Thinking about it as father/daughter time...

Aw, no comment chain started by my comment? I wonder if it just wasn't that interesting.

Extra on page 45 on July 4 U-S-A! U-S-A!

[spoiler-box]Oof, I've gotta study the opening chord of this...

Blegh. Almost a month-long break. I'm ten months behind now. And I lost my ten page lead.
Let's try this again.

Extra on 6/20/17

[spoiler-box]You seem to be struggling with present and past...

I'm glad you're carrying on my tradition which I only did like once

I thought I saw a website that had that kind of format. Each chapter was on its own page, and at the bottom, you would have a list of things that could happen next. So you click on one of them and...

Please do

Yeah, it's a fun little tool to work with. I think it'll work better for say, writing prompts on Reddit. Or little short stories you write on the side.

See, I told you we had readers!

Yeah, that's pretty much how it's used. It's really surreal how it's used. It draws you in by having a quick fortune (Today, you will experience heavy traffic if...

Hm... I didn't notice at the time, but now that you mention it, there was kind of a lucid dreamlike vibe to your flashback sections. I didn't catch it at all.

Future tense is really trippy. At...

I'm not gonna lie, it took me a long time to write all of that. But the mood struck me, and it seemed useful to give you feedback. I'm not sure all of it was constructive, but if even a little bit...

It's super easy to skim past something that just makes sense to you, but is actually nonsense. That's true for any creative act. Like in Mario Maker, it's obvious to you what you're supposed to do...

[spoiler-box]I think I only noticed you do it once or twice. And only once in a way that I disliked, but I can't remember where it was.

And yeah, it just sounds kinda clunky. I think the reason...

Extra on May 16 on page 44

[spoiler-box]“Maaaaaaammaaaaaa,” she rudely gargles outside the room’s fern colored walls.
I loved this line

The two yoshis are very different. Bitol seems pretty...

Extra on May 2

[spoiler-box]Oh, I see what stukasa was saying about lyrics being distracting now. Even though it's in another language. How odd.

I expected the banther to be much more of a...

Extra on page 44, on april 11

[spoiler-box]Rappies hail all the way back to Phantasy Star III. In fact, the last time I played that game, I got just far enough to be slaughtered by a pack of...

Ah, that would explain it. The extra effort and enthusiasm showed.

I think details do a ton to make writing more interesting. You have to balance it of course, but if you can match it so that...

April Fools on page 44

[spoiler-box]I love this intro.

There's something subtle you do that conducts how I'm viewing the scene. I noticed it a few chapters ago, but it popped up again here....

Well that's not going to work. The tool I use to write homes hundreds of worlds to delve into.



That sounds more reasonable. Though I tend to lose motivation the longer I keep at something......

Yeah, I've always envied how quickly he can chug them out. But I have to admit, my timeline is not too different from his. The difference is, I can't write when I don't feel like it. Most days I...

1-3 days spent each week working on this, for...I want to say, years? That's some impressive commitment.

The weekly thing is what gets me. I tend to devote myself to one thing at a time, so to have the focus to keep at it with no distracts is something else.
Finally, how long would you say it took to...

Oh man, I quit reading right before Yoshi quit writing? That feels really bad.
Well, I'm excited to find out if anything changed with you in that time. I guess I'll see in the April Fool's arc.

Extra on May 24, 2016, on page 42

[spoiler-box]Nice, right into the battle.
How does this family always get into situations like this? I swear, in a world of beasts and giant monsters, it's...

Extra on May 17, 2016, on page 42

[spoiler-box]Ack, got confused which Yoshi I was working with! That first line took me by surprise.

Looks like...this chapter is just establishing the dynamic...