FanFic: The Guardian -- Ch. 11 -- The Never-Ending Conflict

[Hunter_Daigoyin]

Great, of course. I just wish I had more reviews for my fic. Then again, mine was stalled for months.

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[Robert_Wolf]

Wow, I just reread Ch. 11, and it kinda sucked. I tried to get way too much in a short amount of time.

Apologies.

[Hikara]

It looked good to me! I liked it!

Oh, and Rob, if you require info., I can't get on the messenger, so PM me instead, alright?

[ladyjaderiver]

Oooh, nice. Some parts seemed a bit corny or rushed, but on the whole it was nice. (How did I not read this until now? You PMed me about it and everything... *bangs head on wall*)

[Sunblast]

On 2004-02-29 14:44, MQuantum wrote:
There were a few parts that didn't seem to flow just right or something, but no biggie.

I think I picked up on that as well. The part that I feel was flowing weird is just after the fight with the guy with the auto-rifle. I read the battle very quickly, but when the part about the boy came up, I was still reading too quickly.

I, too, think the battle in the giant cave sounded kinda small. To me, I think it sounded like the Blood War, correct? I still liked the Golden Armor guys. They're like referees!
This chapter did seem to have some problems, but don't let it get you down, Robert. Focus on improving for the next chapter, and don't let this one affect you. I'm sure you can do it.